Shadowrun
Shadowrun Play => Character creation and critique => Topic started by: replicant_soul on <09-24-12/0638:35>
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After seeing The Wire and The Shield, i build (750 karma) a character that draws it inspiration from Omar Little and Vic Mackey.
He was a dirty cop for Lonestar and unlike his old buddy Steve, he did not score a new job with KE. He used to be the leader of a unit similar to the strike team from The shield: smashing faces and kicking in doors at your local gang hideout.
Ever since he lost his job he somewhat misses that. But he found a simple solution: Doing what he does best, for fun and profit: ripping off small gangs.
Since he has no backup, he nowadays relies more on information gathering and surveillance before he knocks with his pimped out 12 gauge.
I was aiming for a well rounded, credible character. Any comments or suggestions?
== Info ==
Street Name: Bronson
Name: Judah Brown
Ork male Age 28
Height 2.02 m Weight 132kg
== Attributes ==
BOD: 6
AGI: 5 (7)
REA: 4 (9)
STR: 5
CHA: 4
INT: 4
LOG: 3
WIL: 3
EDG: 3
== Derived Attributes ==
Essence: 2,2
Initiative: 8 (13)
IP: 1 (3)
Matrix Initiative: 9
Matrix IP: 3
Physical Damage Track: 11
Stun Damage Track: 10
== Active Skills ==
Climbing : 1 Pool: 7
Clubs : 4 [Batons] Pool: 11 (13)
Con : 3 Pool: 7
Disguise : 3 Pool: 7
Dodge : 4 [Ranged] Pool: 15 (17)
Etiquette : 3 Pool: 7
First Aid : 1 Pool: 4
Heavy Weapons : 3 [Grenade Launchers] Pool: 10 (12)
Infiltration : 3 Pool: 10
Intimidation : 2 [Physical] Pool: 6 ( 8 )
Leadership : 3 Pool: 7
Longarms : 5 [Shotguns] Pool: 12 (14)
Negotiation : 3 Pool: 7
Palming : 3 Pool: 10
Perception : 3 Pool: 10
Pistols : 4 [Heavy] Pool: 11 (13)
Shadowing : 3 Pool: 7
Pilot Groundcraft :1[Bike] Pool: 12
== Knowledge Skills ==
Combat Tactics : 3 Pool: 6
Gangs : 4 Pool: 8
Police procedures : 3 Pool: 6
Underworld : 2 Pool: 6
== Contacts ==
Knight Errant Sergant (3,3)
Snitch (2,1)
Fixer (2,1)
== Qualities ==
Allergy (Uncommon, Mild) (Peanuts)
Dependent (Inconvenience)
Low-Light Vision
Poor Self Control (Compulsive - High Danger) (ripping off gangs)
Restricted Gear (Rating 1)
Sensitive Neural Structure
== Lifestyles ==
Low 1 months
== Cyberware/Bioware ==
Attention Coprocessor Rating 3
Move-by-Wire System Rating 2
Muscle Toner Rating 2
Reaction Enhancers Rating 1
== Armor ==
Actioneer Business Clothes 5/3
Camouflage Suit 8/6
+Nonconductivity 6
+Ruthenium Polymer Coating
Form-Fitting Full-Body Suit 6/2
+Chemical Seal
+Fire Resistance 6
+Thermal Damping 6
Helmet 1/2
== Weapons ==
AZ-150 Stun Baton (2x)
DV: 7S(e) AP: -half RC: 0
+Gecko Grip
+ Personalized Grip
Defiance EX Shocker
DV: 8S(e) AP: -half RC: 0
Ruger Thunderbolt w/ Smartgun
+Additional Clip, Pistol
+Electronic Firing
+Firing Selection Change, Small Mod (SA)
+Gas Vent 2
+Smartgun System
DV: 5P AP: -1 RC: 6
Enfield AS-7
+Smartgun System, Internal
+Additional Clip
+Folding Stock, Powered
+Gas Vent 3
+Laser Sight
DV: 7P AP: -1 RC: 5
ArmTech MGL-6
+Airburst Link
+Smartgun System, Internal
+Additional Clip
DV: n. def. AP: - RC: 1
Fichetti Executive Action
DV: 4P AP: - RC: 0
Grenade: Thermal Smoke
DV: (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: Flash-Bang
DV: 6S (10m Radius) AP: -3 RC: 0
Minigrenade: Fragmentation
DV: 12P(f) (-1/m) AP: +5 RC: 0
Minigrenade: Gas
DV: Chemical (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: Gas
DV: Chemical (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: Gas
DV: Chemical (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: High Explosive
DV: 10P (-2/m) AP: -2 RC: 0
Minigrenade: Smoke
DV: (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: Splash
DV: Chemical (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: Splash
DV: Chemical (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Minigrenade: White Phosphorus
DV: 8P/4P (-1/m) AP: -half RC: 0
== Martial Arts ==
Krav Maga
+Ready Weapon as Free Action
+Take Aim as Free Action
Arnis De Mano
+ inflict Dmg with disarm
Disarm
Iaijutsu
Off-Hand Training
Two Weapon Style
Finishing Move
== Commlink ==
Transys Avalon (4, 4, 4, 4)
+Novatech Navi
+Optimization (Command)
+Sim Module (Hot)
+Subvocal Microphone
+Trodes
+Satellite Link
== Gear ==
Ammo: EX-Explosive Rounds (Heavy Pistols) x60
Ammo: EX-Explosive Rounds (Shotguns) x60
Ammo: Flechette Rounds (Shotguns) x60
Ammo: Shock Lock Rounds (Shotguns) x20
Ammo: Stick-n-Shock (Shotguns) x60
Ammo: Stick-n-Shock (Light Pistols) x30
Ammo: Stick-n-Shock (Heavy Pistols) x60
Ammo: Subsonic Rounds (Heavy Pistols) x60
AR Gloves Rating 1
Autopicker Rating 6
Backpack
Biomonitor
Catalyst Stick
Climbing Gear
Command Rating 5
+Copy Protection Rating 5
+Registration
Concealable Holster
Contact Lenses Rating 3
+Image Link
+Vision Enhancement Rating 3
+Smartlink
Datachip x50
Decrypt (Hacked) Rating 4
Dry Lubricant x10
Earbuds Rating 3
+Audio Enhancement Rating 3
+Select Sound Filter Rating 3
+Spatial Recognizer
Encrypt Rating 4
+Copy Protection Rating 4
+Registration
Endoscope Rating 1
Fake License (Cyberware) Rating 4
Fake License (Weapons) Rating 4
Fake SIN (Judah Brown) x3
Flashlight
Gas Mask
Gecko Tape Gloves
Glasses Rating 4
+Flare Compensation
+Thermographic
+Vision Magnification
+Ultrasound
Glue Sprayer
GPS
Grapple Gun
Grenade: Thermal Smoke x12
Handheld Sensor
+Ultrawideband Radar Rating 4
+Radio Signal Scanner Rating 6
Holo Projector x3
Jammer, Area Rating 4
Jammer, Directional Rating 4
Jazz x4
Laser Microphone Rating 6
Maglock Sequencer Rating 6
Medkit Rating 6
Microphone Rating 3
Minigrenade: Flash-Bang x12
Minigrenade: Fragmentation x12
Minigrenade: Gas
+Breathtaker
Minigrenade: Gas x6
+Neuro-Stun
Minigrenade: Gas x3
+Nausea Gas
Minigrenade: High Explosive x12
Minigrenade: Smoke x12
Minigrenade: Splash x6
+KE IV
Minigrenade: Splash x6
+Pepper Punch
Minigrenade: White Phosphorus x6
Monofilament Chainsaw
Nanopaste Disguise (Small Container) x2
Nanopaste Trodes Rating 1
Olfactory Camouflage
Plasteel Restraints x3
Plastic Restraints x20
Quick-Draw Holster
Rappelling Gloves
Rations x8
Scan Rating 4
+Copy Protection Rating 4
+Registration
Smart Pouch System, Ammunition Pouch x4
Smart Pouch System, Combat Load Vest
Sniffer (Hacked) Rating 4
Spoof (Hacked) Rating 4
Stealth Rope (100 m) x4
Stimulant Patch Rating 6 x4
Suite: Pro User
+Analyze Rating 4 [Copy Protection 4; Registration]
+Browse Rating 4 [Copy Protection 4; Registration]
+Command Rating 2 [Copy Protection 2; Registration]
+Edit Rating 4 [Copy Protection 4; Registration]
Survival Kit
Tag Eraser
Tool Kit (Toolbox)
Tranq Patch Rating 10 x4
Trauma Patch
White Noise Generator Rating 6
Wire Clippers
== Vehicles ==
MCT Fly-Spy (Minidrone)
+Improved Takeoff and Landing Level 2
+Maneuver (Self) Rating 2
+Copy Protection Rating 2
+Registration
+Minidrone Sensor
Renraku Stormcloud (Medium)
+Lighter Than Air
+Clearsight Rating 3
+Copy Protection Rating 3
+Registration
+Medium Drone Sensor
Shiawase Kanmushi (Microdrone)
+Gecko Tips
+Microdrone Sensor
Yamaha Growler (Off-Road Bike)
+Morphing License Plate
+Motorcycle Gyro Stabilization
+Off-Road Suspension
+Satellite Communication
+Spoof Chip
+Vehicle Sensor
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-Your character backstory tells me that your character should be a SINner.
-You can drop Strength down to 5, even Strength values don't give you much.
-You would be better off taking Gymnastics than Dodge. Gymnastics is easier to improve with 'wares, and also let's you jump.
-This is a matter of personal preference, but I wouldn't take Restricted armor like the Chameleon Suit, since you can't wear it about town without being harassed. I would trade it is for a Lined Coat with Gel Pacs and Ruthenium Coating, Helmet, full ST PPPS equipment, and Full-Body Form-Fitting. Ruthenium Coating isn't obvious without a careful examination, so you can afford to wear it. That brings you up to 15B/13I at 10/10 Encumbrance (compared to your current 15/10 at 12/10), allowing you to also drop a point of Body. (Besides, Lined Coats let you conceal weapons and look totally appropriate on ex-cops.)
-Active Skillsofts are so expensive that you may want to reconsider your Move-By-Wire system, and Knowsofts can be replaced with Datasoft+Data Search.
-You have no silenced weapons. You should.
-Consider Concealed Holsters for your pistols and melee weapons, and slings for your larger weapons, to aid in concealment.
-Outside of Disarm, your other Martial Arts maneuvers aren't that useful. Consider dropping them.
-With your recouped karma, you should buy a score of 1 in the appropriate Pilot skills for your drones, in case you need to jump in.
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SINer: Because he worked undercover and LS suspected a mole his SIN got erased as a precautionary measure...
Strength: right, it does not help with melee damage and climbing can be boosted with gear; good point.
Dodge: yes, gymnastics is more versatile but he's a cop, not a dancer. MBW adds 2 points of dodge, too. Some Martial arts, too.
Chameleon Suit: It's a totally legal (4) camouflage suit, modded witch ruthenium
Body: considering his strength, he would be pretty wimpy for an ork.
Skillsofts: yes, they are extremely expensive, but also extremely versatile. I for sure need to find a hacker contact who can pirate them soon.
Weapon mods: Oh boy, totally forgot about the silencer. Will add one to the Ruger. Other mods, too. good tip!
MA maneuvers:
Iaijutsu+ Quickdraw as free action: I can quickdraw ANY Weapon as a free action. Sounds pretty usefull.
Offhand training + Two weapon style + disarm= free disarming attempt without splitting the dicepool with 17 dice (clubs x2 +REA -4) vs Melee pool of the opponent sounds awesome enough.
Vehicle skills would be handy, indeed.
Thx :-)
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EDIT:
dropped Strength to 5
specialised Dodge in Ranged
Added Martial Arts Arnis De Mano (Dmg with disarm + Finishing Move)
added Geko & Pesonalized grip to Stun Batons
Added sound suppresor to Ruger
Swapped Bike