Shadowrun
Shadowrun Play => Character creation and critique => Topic started by: SeriousOne338 on <10-22-12/1819:38>
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So I've been rolling the idea around of the crazy adrenaline junkie rich boy who's decided to start running around in the shadows to pass the time.
So let’s start his story:
Alex Marshal was born in the finest hospital in Seattle that money could afford. His parents Jim and Jane West thought he would grow up and go into the family business. His childhood was spent in boarding schools, summers spent at camps designed to train youth to become part of the management class of the mega corporate world. It was in high school that Alex discovered his magic talent, instead of focusing it on spells like his family wanted him to, he focused the magic inward to hone his body. This might be because it would attract the ladies. It was also at this time he discovered his drug of choice adrenaline. Despising his parents for keeping in restrictive schools Alex started sneaking out at night entering a local parkour, free running, gang the Dare Devils. When his parents found out of his nightly activities he was moved to Denver to finish his schooling. Upon graduation from high school he was entered into 4 year business degree program which he was expelled from due to bad grades. His parents desperate to make him join the ranks of mega corporate management made him an ultimatum either get with the program or he’s cut off. Alex choose what he saw as freedom and walked out, right now his only assistance from his family is an apartment he owns in downtown Seattle. New to the shadows he’s been doing smuggling runs on an old Street Racer, but he’s looking for better paydays in the shadows.
Character sheet so far:
== Info ==
Street Name: Junkie
Name: Alex West
Movement: 10/25, Swim: 5
Karma: 0
Street Cred: 0
Notoriety: 0
Public Awareness: 0
Human Male Age 26
Height 5'10" Weight 170lb
Composure: 4
Judge Intentions: 5
Lift/Carry: 9 (60 kg/40 kg)
Memory: 4
Nuyen: 0
== Attributes ==
BOD: 5
AGI: 4 (5)
REA: 4 (5)
STR: 4
CHA: 2
INT: 3
LOG: 2
WIL: 2
EDG: 2
MAG: 5
== Derived Attributes ==
Essence: 6
Initiative: 7 ( 8 )
IP: 1 (2)
Astral Initiative: 6
Astral IP: 3
Matrix Initiative: 7
Matrix IP: 1
Physical Damage Track: 11
Stun Damage Track: 9
== Active Skills ==
Stealth Group: 1
+Shadowing : 1 Pool: 4
+Palming : 1 Pool: 6
+Infiltration : 1 Pool: 6
+Disguise : 1 Pool: 4
Influence Group: 2
+Con : 2 Pool: 4
+Etiquette : 2 Pool: 4
+Leadership : 2 Pool: 4
+Negotiation : 2 Pool: 4
Armorer : 2 [Firearms] Pool: 4 (6)
Automatics : 3 [Submachine Guns] Pool: 8 (10)
Climbing : 3 [Freehand] Pool: 10 (12)
Demolitions : 2 [Improvised Explosives] Pool: 4 (6)
Diving : 2 Pool: 7
First Aid : 1 Pool: 3
Gymnastics : 5 [Parkour] Pool: 14 (16)
Parachuting : 1 [BASE Jumping] Pool: 6 ( 8 )
Perception : 3 [Visual] Pool: 6 ( 8 )
Pilot Ground Craft : 2 [Bike] Pool: 8 (10)
Running : 4 [Urban] Pool: 12 (14)
Swimming : 1 [Long Distance] Pool: 8 (10)
== Knowledge Skills ==
Area Knowledge: Seattle : 3 Pool: 6
Chemistry : 2 Pool: 4
English : N Pool: 0
Firearms : 1 Pool: 3
Police procdues : 3 Pool: 5
Security Design : 3 Pool: 6
Smuggling Routes : 3 Pool: 6
== Contacts ==
Mom & Dad (3, 1)
== Qualities ==
Adept
Hung Out to Dry
In Debt (15,000¥)
Natural Athlete
Poor Self Control (Thrill Seeker)
SINner (Standard) (Alex Marshal)
The Athlete's Way
Trust Fund (Medium Lifestyle)
== Powers ==
Attribute Boost (AGI) Rating: 1 (AW)
Freefall Rating: 4 (Geas) (AW)
Great Leap Rating: 4 (Geas) (AW)
Improved Ability (Non-Combat) (Pilot Ground Craft) Rating: 1(AW)
Improved Physical Attribute (AGI) Rating: 1(AW)
Improved Reflexes 1 (Geas)
Prodigious Physicality Rating: 3
Wall Running(AW)
== Lifestyles ==
Loft 1 months (His Apartment)
Comforts: Middle
Entertainment: Low
Necessities: Middle
Neighborhood: Luxury
Security: Middle
Qualities: Free Access [1LP]
Workplace [1LP]
Living by Committee [-2LP]
Nosy Neighbors [-2LP]
== Armor ==
Bike Racing Armor 5/8
+Gel Packs
Bike Racing Helmet 1/2
+Flare Compensation
+Image Link
Camouflage Suit 8/6
+Thermal Damping 6
== Weapons ==
Ares Executive Protector w/ Smartlink
+Foregrip
+Folding Stock, Powered
+Personalized Grip
+Smartgun System
+Sound Suppressor
Pool: 10 (12) DV: 5P AP: - RC: 3
Grenade: Thermal Smoke
Pool: 4 DV: (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Ingram Smartgun X
+Stock
+Gas Vent 2
+Smartgun System
+Sound Suppressor
+Underbarrel Weight
Pool: 10 (12) DV: 5P AP: - RC: 4
Unarmed Attack
Pool: 4 DV: 2S AP: - RC: 0
Walther PB-120
Pool: 4 DV: 4P AP: - RC: 0
== Commlink ==
Transys Avalon (4, 4, 3, 4)
+Novatech Navi
== Gear ==
Ammo: EX-Explosive Rounds (Submachine Guns) x70
Ammo: Regular Ammo (Submachine Guns) x1000
Auto-Rappel
Catalyst Stick
Catalyst Stick
Certified Credstick, Standard Rating 345
Climbing Gear
Climbing Gear
Datachip x4
Datachip x50
Detonating Cord Rating 8 x20
DocWagon Contract: Gold
Endoscope Rating 1 x2
Exploder, Electrical Rating 4 x2
Fake SIN (Alex Cross) x3
Foam Explosive Rating 4
Gecko Tape Gloves
Glasses Rating 4
+Smartlink
+Vision Enhancement Rating 3
+Flare Compensation
+Low Light
Grapple Gun
Grapple Gun x2
Grenade: Thermal Smoke x4
Jammer, Area Rating 4 x2
Jammer, Directional Rating 4
Laser Microphone Rating 6
Lockpick Set
Medkit Rating 4
Microphone Rating 6
Micro-Transceiver Rating 6 x2
Nanopaste Disguise (Small Container) x5
Periscope x2
Radio Signal Scanner Rating 4
Radio Signal Scanner Rating 6 x2
Rappelling Gloves
Rappelling Gloves
Respirator Rating 4
Standard RFID Tags x20
Stealth Rope (100 m) x3
Stealth Rope (100 m) x4
Survival Kit
Tag Eraser x2
Tool Kit (Firearms)
White Noise Generator Rating 4
White Noise Generator Rating 6
Wingsuit
Wire Clippers x2
== Vehicles ==
Indian Pathfinder (Racing Bike)
+Morphing License Plate
+Spoof Chip
+Vehicle Sensor
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I'd allocate 20 more BP to your abilities (since they're a b*tch to boost after play), you're only at 180 I think. If you want to be more functional in a stealth (and combat) and face role, go 1 more on AGI and 1 more on CHA maybe? Also, melee damage rounds up from Str/2. You want an odd Strength. Since you're not a melee guy, if you drop that, you have 3 more attribute points you could divy out towards being better at the stuff you aren't so good at but want to do.
Depending on what you want out of this character, I'd advise refining your skill list, your kind of 'meh' at a lot of stuff and not really good at much. You limp in on the stealth and influence groups when they're not your focus, but yet you have all the athletics skills, and they seem to be the central theme of your char. (athletics), but you're not utilizing the skill group there, I don't understand? Armorer is something easily contracted out to NPCs that you're really just not good at, drop it. I imagine people will tell you to drop your specializations, and take advantage of cheap base-skill purchases now, and I agree since you have so many of them. Drop some specializations, and make solid base pools instead on your key abilities.
You should redo your armor, ditch the camo suit (which would encumber you if paired with you jacket and helmet) and get FFFBA and PPP to round out the racing jacket. Go ruthenium if you want the extra sneaky-sneak-sneak.
Your glasses exceed the base 12 availability limit. I'd split up your visual buffs, get contacts with smartlink and flare comp (you always want these) - and image link if you want and then trick out a pair of glasses with the more situational stuff (low-light, x3 enhancement, etc.). The helmet visor viz enhancements should be pretty tertiary buffs as it won't always look... normal... to have your racing helmet on. Also, why no earbuds with audio enhancements?
It seems like your role is as a gunman, mainly (since gymnast/athlete isn't necessarily a role)? If you have a dearth of Y, maybe bite the MAG bullet, get synaptic boosters II so you'll have 3 IPs (lose the Improved Reflexes of course, and drop another .25 in Powers)? You'll be a better combatant for it than you'll achieve through Powers (without Way of the Warrior).
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Well I re-wrote him made him an ork more styled like the Gun Adept, I'm not going to crazy amount of IP passes but a good single hit rather than fire as many times as possible.
== Info ==
Street Name: Junkie
Name: Alex Marshal
Movement: 10/25, Swim: 5
Karma: 0
Street Cred: 0
Notoriety: 1
Public Awareness: 0
Ork Male Age 28
Height 6'1" Weight 220lb
Composure: 5
Judge Intentions: 5
Lift/Carry: 10 (75 kg/50 kg)
Memory: 6
Nuyen: 8000
== Attributes ==
BOD: 5
AGI: 5 (7)
REA: 5 (7)
STR: 5
CHA: 2
INT: 3
LOG: 3
WIL: 3
EDG: 1
MAG: 5
== Derived Attributes ==
Essence: 6
Initiative: 8 (10)
IP: 1
Astral Initiative: 6
Astral IP: 3
Matrix Initiative: 7
Matrix IP: 2
Physical Damage Track: 11
Stun Damage Track: 10
== Active Skills ==
++FireArms Skill Group: 4++
-Automatics : 4 Pool: 11
-Longarms : 4 Pool: 13
-Pistols : 4 Pool: 11
++Athletics Skill Group: 4++
-Climbing : 4 Pool: 11
-Flight : 4 Pool: 11
-Gymnastics : 4 Pool: 13
-Running : 4 Pool: 11
-Swimming : 4 Pool: 11
Armorer : 2 Pool: 5
Demolitions : 2 Pool: 5
Etiquette : 1 Pool: 3
Gunnery : 1 Pool: 8
Perception : 4 Pool: 7
Pilot Ground Craft : 4 [Bike] Pool: 13 (15)
Unarmed Combat : 1 Pool: 8
== Knowledge Skills ==
Area Knowledge: Seattle : 3 Pool: 6
Chemistry : 2 [Explosives] Pool: 5 (7)
English : N Pool: 0
Firearms : 2 Pool: 5
Japanese : 2 [Speak] Pool: 5 (7)
Security Companies : 2 Pool: 5
Smuggling Routes : 5 Pool: 8
== Contacts ==
Mom and Dad (4, 1)
== Qualities ==
Adept
Distinctive Style (5 pts)
Hung Out to Dry
In Debt (10,000¥)
Incompetent (Survival)
Lightning Reflexes
Low-Light Vision
SINner (Standard) (Alex Marshal)
The Athlete's Way
== Powers ==
Freefall Rating: 4 [WA]
Great Leap Rating: 2 [WA]
Improved Ability (Combat) (Longarms) Rating: 2 [Geasa]
Improved Ability (Non-Combat) (Pilot Ground Craft) Rating: 2 [WA]
Improved Physical Attribute (AGI) Rating: 2[WA]
Prodigious Physicality Rating: 2[WA]
== Lifestyles ==
+Condo 3 months
Comforts: Middle
Entertainment: Middle
Necessities: Middle
Neighborhood: Luxury
Security: High
Qualities: Easy-Going Landlord [1LP]
Hasty Exit [2LP]
Workplace [1LP]
Living by Committee [-2LP]
This Isn't Big Bob's Autos [-1LP]
+The Farm 2 months
Comforts: Middle
Entertainment: Street
Necessities: Middle
Neighborhood: Middle
Security: Low
Qualities: Easy-Going Landlord [1LP]
Free Access [1LP]
Hasty Exit [2LP]
Green Plan [-1LP]
== Armor ==
Bike Racing Armor 5/8
+Chemical Protection 6
+Gel Packs
+Thermal Damping 6
Bike Racing Helmet 1/2
+Flare Compensation
+Image Link
== Weapons ==
Ares Desert Strike
+Imaging Scope
+Shock Pad
+Smartgun System, Internal
+Barrel Extension
+Easy Breakdown, Powered
+Folding Stock, Powered
+Sound Suppressor
Pool: 15 DV: 8P AP: -3 RC: 0
Ruger Super Warhawk
+Concealable Holster
+Custom Look Rating 2
+Firing Selection Change, Small Mod (SA)
+Increased Cylinder
Pool: 11 DV: 6P AP: -2 RC: 0
Ruger Thunderbolt w/ Smartgun
+Smartgun System, Internal
+Sound Suppressor
+Custom Look Rating 2
+Extended Clip
+Personalized Grip
+Smartgun System
+Underbarrel Weight
Pool: 13 DV: 5P AP: -1 RC: 4
Grenade: Thermal Smoke
Pool: 6 DV: (10m Radius) AP: - RC: 0
Unarmed Attack
Pool: 8 DV: 3S AP: - RC: 0
== Commlink ==
Transys Avalon (4, 4, 3, 4)
+Sim Module (Cold)
+Biometric Reader
+Armor Case Rating 5
+Novatech Navi
== Gear ==
++AMMO++
-Ammo: EX-Explosive Rounds (Heavy Pistols) x500
-Ammo: EX-Explosive Rounds (Sniper Rifles) x100
-Ammo: Regular Ammo (Heavy Pistols) x1000
-Ammo: Regular Ammo (Sniper Rifles) x200
-Ammo: RFID Rounds (Sniper Rifles) x50
-Ammo: Tracker Rounds, Stealth Tag (Sniper Rifles) x50
- Grenade: Thermal Smoke x4
++ID & Licenses++
-Fake License (Ruger Super Warhawk) Rating 4
-Fake License (Contact Lenses) Rating 4
-Fake License (Gel Packs) Rating 4
-Fake License (Driver License) Rating 4
-Fake SIN (Alex marcus) Rating 4
++Survival Gear++
-Auto-Rappel
-Climbing Gear
-Catalyst Stick
-Standard RFID Tags x20
-Stealth Rope (100 m) x3
-Survival Kit
-Wingsuit
-Wire Clippers
++Perception Enhancers++
-Contact Lenses Rating 2
+Smartlink
+Vision Magnification
- Glasses Rating 3
+Image Link
+Low Light
+Vision Enhancement Rating 3
-Headphones Rating 3
+Audio Enhancement Rating 3
+Spatial Recognizer
++Explosives++
-Detonating Cord Rating 8 x10
-Exploder, Electrical Rating 3 x4
-Electrical Detonator x4
-Foam Explosive Rating 8 x3
-Shockwave Detonator Rating 1 x2
Antibiotics Rating 5 x4
Certified Credstick, Gold Rating 1000 x3
Datachip x4
Light Stick x4
Medkit Rating 4
Radio Detonator x4
Radio Signal Scanner Rating 4
Respirator Rating 4
Tool Kit (Firearms)
Tool Kit (Demolitions)
White Noise Generator Rating 4
== Vehicles ==
Suzuki Mirage (Racing Bike)
+Morphing License Plate
+Motorcycle Gyro Stabilization
+Off-Road Tires Rating 2
+Spoof Chip
+Weapon Mount (Normal, Concealed, Fixed, Manual)
+Vehicle Sensor