@hadaalia
Nice concept and a useful spell selection. Combining Mentor Spirit Bat with Pregnancy and a Day Job is a bold move. That might get interesting
@Raiderjoseph
This one's a lot better. Although Paranoia is a very harsh neg. quality. You might want to read the rules for that again.
Also you seem to have bought 3 spells with 10 Karma, but maybe that's a typo that should read 15. You went over 25 points in negative Qualities. I allow it, but you won't get more than 25 points out of them.
Regarding your spells, you have a lot of redundancies: Two direct single target combat spells isn't that useful. My recomendation would be to rely on stun and get an indirect one like lightning bolt if you want to do physical damage
Likewise one Window spell is usually enough, dito Clairvoyance.
Mindlink is nice, but a commlink and a trode net usually work as well.
Just my two cents 
Alright I think that frees up some karma then. I think ill take Flamethrower over Lightning Bolt since its a preferred spell though. Im actually kinda hoping they hire both of us. Also Mindlink is so he can share through the Astral whats going on to the others in the group. It feels like a, as it happens, sort of relay would have its advantages.
Here is improved version now with utility spells!
-- Priorities --
Metatype E Human
Attributes C 16
Magic A Mage: 6
Skills A 46/10
Resources E 6000
-- Karma Expenditure --
25 Starting Karma
-5 for Mentor Spirit: Dog
-6 for Photographic Memory
-2 for Speed Reader
-10 for Astral Chameleon
+5 for Phobia (Mild): Black Magic Tradition Users
+10 for Insomnia
+5 for Simsense Vertigo
+5 for Distinctive Style: Aren’t you a little young to be a Shadowrunner?
-10 for 20000
-2 for Force 1 Spellcasting Foci (Combat)
-10 for Mindlink, Mana Static
-4 for Floatknife
Remaining
1
-- Attributes --
Body 2
Agility 3
Reaction 3
Strength 2
Willpower 4
Logic 3
Intuition 6
Charisma 1
Edge 3
Essence 6.00
Initiative – 8+1d6
Physical Condition Monitor - 9
Stun Condition Monitor - 11
Overflow Boxes - 2
Physical Limit - 3
Mental Limit - 7
Social Limit - 4
-- Qualities --
Mage: Chaos Tradition
Mentor Spirit: Dog
Photographic Memory
Speed Reader
Astral Chameleon
Phobia (Mild): Black Magic Tradition Users
Insomnia Rating 1
Simsense Vertigo
Distinctive Style: Aren’t you a little young to be a Shadowrunner?
-- Skills --
Assenting (Wards): 6 (
Astral Combat 6
Spellcasting (Detection): 6 (
Counterspelling (Combat): 6 (
Perception (Searching): 6 (
Artisan (Cooking): 4 (6)
Pistols 3
Pilot Groundcraft 3
Sneaking 3
Gymnastics 3
First Aid 2
Unarmed Combat: 2
-- Skill Groups --
Conjuring 6
Outdoors 4
-- Knowledge/Language Skills --
English: N
Japanese: 6
Italian: 3
Interests:
Magic Theory (Mentor Spirits): 6 (
5th World Fiction (Manga): 6 (
Cooking: 4
Academic:
Literature: 3
-- Augmentations/Magic/Adept Powers --
Heal
Stunbolt
Flamethrower
Invisibility
Astral Clairvoyance
Chaos
Chaos World
Mana Barrier
Mindlink
Mana Static
Power Barrier
Astral Window
-- Gear --
26000
-4000 for Force 1 Spellcasting Foci (Combat) Ring
-4000 for Low Lifestyle 2 months
-5000 for Doc Wagon Standard Contract 1 year
-1500 for Magical Lodge Materials Rating 3
-1500 for 30 Drams of Reagents
-375 for Fichetti Security 600
Acc: 6(7) Dmg: 7P Mode: SA Recoil: 1 Ammo: 30
-15 for 3 Clips for Fichetti Security 600
-2400 for 120 rounds of Light Pistol Ammo
-3000 for Dodge Scoot
-1000 for Armor Jacket
-50 for Nice Clothes (T shirt and Jeans)
-75 for Nice Clothes (Button up collared sleeve with khakis and tennis shoes)
-5 for Credstick
-20 for Gold Credstick
-1000 for Renraku Sensei
-250 for Fake SIN (Mary Sue)
-750 for Medkit Rating 3
-200 for Medkit Supplies
Remaining Money - + ()
760 nuyen
-- Contacts –
Jack Alan AKA Floatknife: Talismonger, Ex Runner
Loyalty: 4 Connection: 3
Floatknife is named after a party trick he does with a floating knife. He also was Eyesight’s in on the shadow sjde of magic. Eyesight met him a while back through his dad and the two of them have had a decent relationship. He did errands for him in the astral realm for money and in exchange taught him a few spells. Now that his Dad has been extracted he is helping him get a leg in the shadows